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shadows no longer
chase me in the dark
now that I walk
with you under these stars
we write time together
with our dreams
and watch it stand still
for an hour
may the sun set sail
on your heart and
bring me along
for the ride
when the shadows fade
we will be left to
drift into rapture
euphoristalgic
chase me in the dark
now that I walk
with you under these stars
we write time together
with our dreams
and watch it stand still
for an hour
may the sun set sail
on your heart and
bring me along
for the ride
when the shadows fade
we will be left to
drift into rapture
euphoristalgic
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it's surely nice to see new writing from you 
hope to see more of it very soon.
i think this only proves that you're getting better with your words as time goes on. you seem to wield them as your weapon; a very effective weapon they are.
you used image-evoking phrases and situational moments well here, in that the text requires no thought. the scenes appear instantly and vividly.
the ending was, i think, just right. i disagree with the above; prolonging the poem wouldn't serve to elevate it any higher.
in all, i must say the text evoked images in my mind reminiscent of those that spring up from the work of frost.
hope to see more of it very soon.i think this only proves that you're getting better with your words as time goes on. you seem to wield them as your weapon; a very effective weapon they are.
you used image-evoking phrases and situational moments well here, in that the text requires no thought. the scenes appear instantly and vividly.
the ending was, i think, just right. i disagree with the above; prolonging the poem wouldn't serve to elevate it any higher.
in all, i must say the text evoked images in my mind reminiscent of those that spring up from the work of frost.