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I'll steal your dreams
along with the night
and give them back
when I perfect them

my love will remain
your sunless shadow
so never try to run
from your shadow
or try to lose the
shadow in the light

this unintentional plan
is majestic and elaborate

tonight is only a shy
tomorrow with hopes
to arrive early

but I'd rather him
wait so I can revel
in this with you








antitransient
©2005-2009 ~blender13
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"my love will remain
your sunless shadow
so never try to run
from your shadow
or try to lose the
shadow in the light"

repetition of shadow kinda gets to me, and reads funny when its repeated so close together

"this unintentional plan
is majestic and elaborate"
i was waiting for something brilliant here but it just ends xD

i like as always :D
it just feels too brief... antitransient? shouldnt it be longer then? lol
just think that it should be longer to really capture the possible beauty of this piece :)

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